End Note: Your essay is off to a great start! You included some great points, specifically those when you reference the narrative projects. The inclusion of these real stories strengthens your essay as a whole. Though I would elaborate on some comments that you made. In your thesis, I would expand on how narratives play a role in understanding who we are. This would sharpen the focus of and strengthen your thesis. Perhaps something along the lines of how we deal with experiences shapes our identity? There was another point that you made about how narratives need to be created in an unconscious way. Explaining why would help readers understand why narratives can so easily be swayed to become inauthentic. Finally, enter further discussion in your conclusion about how ‘narratives are a very important aspect of human communication.’ You have not discussed it in the rest of your essay so I would include a paragraph that explains this so that it is more clear why you are including this point in your conclusion. In addition, there are some sentences that I would restructure and I included some suggestions in my margin comments. Overall, your essay looks great so far!
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