Endnote: Your essay is off to a great start. I really like how you introduced your sources within your introduction. This makes it clear for the reader as to where your evidence is coming from and the context behind it. When further developing your essay, I would make sure to go more in-depth. I added some comments where you could be a little bit more specific so the reader can build a better understanding of the points you are making. Adding quotes may be helpful with this. For example, be more specific as to why art is the connecting element between mental health and the science behind our minds to make your thesis stronger. Also, when discussing each of the sources within your essay, make sure to elaborate on their messages and how they relate to one another. Finally, make sure you relate your thoughts and discussions of each source back to your thesis so the reader understands how they all connect to one another.
Your final official peer review is beautiful. You ask meaningful questions and make specific and helpful suggestions. You manage to leave feedback that touches on your peer’s ideas, organization, and evidence. Amazing work!