Before Revisions: Art allows us to think beyond reason and make sense of the unknown, especially in science. Jonah Lehrer claims this within his essay “The Future of Science…is Art?”, developing Ma’s argument in the process. He explains that “it’s clear that solving the deepest mysteries of the brain-what the philosopher David Chalmers calls ‘the hard questions of consciousness’- will require a new scientific approach, one that is able to incorporate the wisdom of the arts.” According to Lehrer, art will offer a new perspective because they exceed what is thought possible of reality. It is vital to bring together the arts and sciences as it is the only way in which ideas surrounding each can be exchanged with one another. When they become intertwined, critical and empathetic reasoning are linked together creating a balance between thought processes that allow us to answer questions addressing the remaining mysteries in the world.

After Revisions: Art allows us to think beyond reason and make sense of the unknown, especially in science. Jonah Lehrer claims this within his essay “The Future of Science…is Art?” and develops Ma’s argument. He explains that “it’s clear that solving the deepest mysteries of the brain-what the philosopher David Chalmers calls ‘the hard questions of consciousness’- will require a new scientific approach, one that is able to incorporate the wisdom of the arts.” According to Lehrer, art will offer a new perspective because they exceed what is thought possible of reality. It is vital to bring together the arts and sciences. It is the only way in which ideas surrounding each can be exchanged with one another. When they become intertwined, critical and empathetic reasoning are linked together. This creates a balance between thought processes, allowing us to answer the questions addressing the remaining mysteries in the world.

Reflection on Revisions: Klinkenborg suggests writing shorter sentences within essays to ensure that they say do not include words that would complicate the subject of the sentence. While making revisions to this paragraph within my essay, I made sure to do just that. I shortened sentences, especially those containing two independent clauses, and created multiple sentences out of the initial one. These revisions made my sentences flow into one another and be more concise as they went right to the point. This resulted in this paragraph as a whole to be more understandable to readers as the subject of my sentences was not clouded by surrounding, unnecessary verbiage. When making revisions to my final essay as a whole, I will keep Klinkenborg’s advice in mind and look for sentences that can be shortened, leading to a more concise and comprehensible essay.